October Girl

this was.... powereful.... disterbing.... umm..... ok I guess.

(Marc Luna) I needed to pack my bags and say goodbye. For some reason I felt as if I needed to push her away so that it wouldn't be as ...

Rogue (Robyn) "No worries darling." I said pulling a needle out of the back of my neck and then stitching it back up. I then put the needle back in ...

I love lightning!!! 7/10

(Jess) My eyelids fluttered open, I looked up to see faded white paint, The ceiling was so high and the air was chilled. I felt my neck, nothing was there, ...

Rogue (Robyn) "Excuse me." I said taking Dent gently by the arm and leading him away gracefully. Once were were alone I looked at him as if I were looking ...

***so uh..... now what?****

Rogue (Robyn) "Dent! Apologize! Watch where you're going." Storm clouds raced across my face, he'd done it on purpose. I'd know Dent ever since they day we got here, he ...

For being so new at poetry this is great. It wasn't long so bear with me here. I felt a small conection of emotion but not as much as I ...

6/10 ah..... sweet.......

Rogue (Robyn) "Oh, I hadn't noticed." I joked. "What happened?" He asked, not even looking at his tent, which looked like they had tooken a old quilt and sewed it ...

(Jess) "I realized I was screaming as blood trickled down my neck. It felt as if he were chewing on my neck as if it were gum. "Ah...." I choked, ...

**Fine*** (Jess) I stopped from walking, ah what the hell why not? I moved all my blonde hair from one side, exposing half of my neck. "You could try... I ...

Hmmm, very well done. I like this,are you going to write more? The title caught my eye so I thought I'd take a look. Nice work Angel! -Max

***oh sorry, well lets mix things up a bit***